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Amanda Izzo's avatar

"This particular cul-de-sac lay on a pile of land formed by large mechanical creatures some 13 odd years ago. They were driven by men who had taken their roles in order to pay for smaller ranch-style houses further inland. This was not their story, even though they were integral to its very existence. Our story lies at the end of the tightly packed white gravel drive, behind a door marked 1247. A door just like the other 29 doors, in a house that looked like 5 others on the peninsula, though a keen observer might notice the small collection of unusual shells arranged with curious precision along the porch railing."

This is where my attention became tunnel vision. I was so hooked and immersed by this point!!!

As far as setting a reader adrift down a story line that's exciting and compelling, you beyond nailed it. The ending, Dave's certainty in his being chosen and inflating with pride, though he doesn't understand the mission he's called for or where it will lead him?

I am demanding a series.

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Hina Gondal's avatar

Brilliant!

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